以下是我几翻修改过的发信,望各位英雄好汉给点宝贵意见

悠dede
? ? 最近努力学习与更改发信自己的发信,找出以前家资料,经过一翻调查与分析,发了一些询盘给目标性比较大的客户。结果还是有去无回,连个NO,THANKS 都没有,老外真的有这么懒吗?为什么交友网上的老外又是那么的勤快。有点进步是退件邮件没几封了。这要感谢各位前辈的正确指点!


以下是我几翻修改过的发信,望各位英雄好汉给点宝贵意见:





1.



Hi


Glad to learn you’re on the market of lighting products.


We are a leading manufacturer of fluorescent
light.and at present, for US market, our superior type is T5 lighting fixture, quality
meet E250778 and ISO90001 standard.


Please
contact us if any questions.your need.?


2.



Glad to get your contact info from lighting market.


We specialize in T5 fluorescent light for 17 years,UL/SMD2835
T5 LED LIGHTING FIXTURE is our newly launched one with
superb quality fashionable design and competitive price, Hope to
be a partner of your company!


E-catalog will be provided if needed.


Email me or call me directly. Thank you!
2014-06-19 335阅读
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以下是您修改过的两份发信的一些建议:

1. Hi,

Glad to learn that you are interested in lighting products.

We are a leading manufacturer of fluorescent lighting fixtures. Our T5 lighting fixture is our superior type for the US market, meeting E250778 and ISO90001 standards for quality.

Please don't hesitate to contact us if you have any questions or needs. We look forward to hearing from you.

2. Hi,

I'm glad to have received your contact information from the lighting market.

We specialize in T5 fluorescent lighting and have been doing so for 17 years. We recently launched a new product, the UL/SMD2835 T5 LED lighting fixture, which boasts excellent quality and a fashionable design at a competitive price. We hope to be a partner of your company!

If you're interested, we can provide an electronic catalog. Feel free to email or call me directly with any questions. Thank you!
2023-06-10
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  • ChenYue
    你邮件回复思路总体都不错的
    2014-06-19
  • oso
    总之一句话,就是永远站在客户的位置,想他可能需要什么,想他可能担心什么,帮他解决问题。任何成功的销都是为客户实现利益,因为客户不会为你的利益单,只会为自己的利益单。
    2014-06-19
  • 邦美眉
    其实这类发信的内容太多了,他们肯定忙不过来看,或则已经习惯了,不妨尝试下把发信的更丰富点,比如有公司的图片,自己本人的相片,等等,如果能加上一些自己社交网站的个人主页效果会更好的。
    2014-06-19
  • 猪猪sjllw
    建议给客户打电话沟通一下。不需要急切的问价格如何,而是问问客户有什么需求之类的,找好切入点,和客户多一些了解。
    2014-06-19
  • Mm兔子好心肠
    写的还是不错的呢~什么行业的呢~
    2014-06-19
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