hair dryer 开发信,大家看下,有什么问题吗

程园园-慧普电器
话说我的开发信就是这么写的our company is a leading manufacturer of personal wall-mounted hair dryers and hand dryers, hing founded for 12 years with certification ccc,cb,gs ce,cmc,rohs and lvd. besides, we are always cooperating with brazil ,italy and france .
if you he any questions ,please contact me .
best wishes
crystal
my skype number : crystal.cheng 1991
wenzhou huipu electric appliances co.,ltd
website:
2014-11-05 1446阅读
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It appears that there are a few grammatical errors and typographical errors in the email. Here are some suggested revisions:

a. "hing" should be revised to "having."
b. Instead of "cooperating with," it would be better to say "serving customers in."
c. "If you he any questions" should be revised to "If you have any questions."
d. It would be better to include the full website address instead of just putting "website:"

Here's a revised version:

Dear [Customer],

Our company, Wenzhou Huipu Electric Appliances Co., Ltd, has been a leading manufacturer of personal wall-mounted hair dryers and hand dryers for 12 years. Our products are certified with CCC, CB, GS, CE, CMC, RoHS and LVD. We have been proudly serving customers in Brazil, Italy and France.

Should you have any questions about our products, please feel free to contact me. You can reach me via Skype at crystal.cheng1991.

Best regards,
Crystal

Wenzhou Huipu Electric Appliances Co., Ltd
Website: [Insert website address here]
2023-06-09
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    有网址很容易会被客户端邮箱助手屏蔽
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  • kevinlee
    如果我站在老外的角度~~你这封信我没什么好回的~~~

    你跟我说你公司信息。然后你想让老外回你什么。price list? catalog?
    2015-10-17
  • 高海燕Hien
    温州的啊
    2015-10-17
  • Chang
    If you "he" any questions ,please contact me .
    應改成”have"
    2015-10-02
  • Grace.Lee
    要简洁
    2015-09-18
  • To.be.a.simple.girl
    哈喽
    2015-03-01
  • karen
    2015-02-28
  • Leondong
    我觉得应该加一个亮点,你们的最大核心竞争力是什么,最直观的给客户,让他一眼就看到,才有兴趣看下去,说明说一样的邮件满天都是,客户很难有兴趣的,可以个性化一点的方式。希望对你有一点点的帮助。
    2015-01-17
  • rachel
    学习一下
    2015-01-16
  • Kevin54
    这样还多啊,那要怎么写,求模板
    2014-11-12
  • 李莉
    感觉文字比较多,外国人喜欢越简单越好。
    2014-11-12
  • Angus.Chen101
    学习学习
    2014-11-11
  • / 淼信国际Lee
    希望你出单
    2014-11-11
  • 程园园-慧普电器
    那你看应该怎么改?
    2014-11-07
  • judy
    太大众化了
    2014-11-06
  • cheer
    来学些看看
    2014-11-06
  • Tina.Zeng
    来学习一下看看
    2014-11-05
  • Alice
    过来看一下
    2014-11-05
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